When I was younger I would see drunk people on the street or at public events like parades, my parents would say they had an illness that leads them to abuse their chosen substance. Because they have that problem and they can't help themselves and if someone tried to help them everything didn't always go well because they were no longer the same person they once were. I thought it might be a disease, because substance abuse affects the brain. I know that many people who suffer from addiction also have some form of mental health issue such as depression. My major is psychology with a concentration in mental health, so as a provider in the future I will be helping those who may be in recovery or have been sober for a while. When someone abuses a substance, their brain changes. They themselves as people also tend to change, becoming someone different. In some cases, when they don't use, they may become ill or show signs of severe depression by staying in bed all day. The disease begins as a choice to use in the first place, but once it starts affecting the brain, it becomes a disease since they cannot stop without having negative effects. The initiation can be triggered by certain events that the person wants to escape from, such as a traumatic event that happened to them. These support my thesis because my belief revolves around these key points. The audience for this essay would be those people who are affected in one way or another. Substance abuse affects the brain in several ways, explaining why the user can be someone they are not while using. I am convinced that addiction can be something other than a choice. The person works hard to clean up, improve their life and in a… medium of paper… more suitable. Peer review helps by having a new pair of unbiased eyes looking at my words to see if they as a reader make sense and help get the point across. Since the essay would be for others, it would be better to have another person's point of view. I may think it's fine, but someone else can see what I can't. Allowing someone else to read my essay as part of the feedback process allows me to write an article that is more for the audience than for me. When they read it, they can see where I may have added extra information that isn't necessary and can report it. Some documents can be burdened by an excess of information. I try to incorporate any feedback provided into the contents of my articles. When I incorporate it, I take what they said, such as rephrasing or removing information, and try to do it. I re-read it to make sure it sounds good and if it doesn't I change it again